Can you please read my poem? and review? Thanks!?
How beautiful the music is which fills
Your ears and mine with lovely verse and song.
The melody coming from the singers’ mouth, it chills.
Music is the life you needed all along,
It brings peace to even the most restless soul,
Music means the world to me
Oh, Music is so beautiful!
It fills the mind with creativity
The chords, which players’ fingers sweetly strum,
Echo throughout the grand halls,
The beat kept by great and steady drums,
The melody, by singers’ heavenly calls.
Once you listen you’ll be asking for more
Music is something you can’t ignore
This is my sonnet. I need some help polishing it to make it the best it can be. It doesn’t have to be in iambic pentameter. Any revisions? Also, could you help me think of a title? Thanks so much!
I think some of your lines are alittle long, and if you shorten them and simplify them, it’ll flow alittle bit more. It sounds good though, I like it.
Joey Notez – Beautiful Soul – w/t Download Link & lyrics – www.RNB.ca.kz – R&B RNB
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